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"Croft of Light" is a forum for poetry, photography, and philology (the love of language). With Emily Dickinson as a tutor, Dag Hammarskjold as a mentor, and Noah Webster as a teacher, I hope to express light through lyric verse. Many of the texts are psalms, meant for musical accompaniment. My style favors simplicity and sincerity. My voice can be comic or serious. My tone may be innocent or ironic. Some of the pieces are just for practice. Respectful responses and comments are welcome.
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of course i like the message. yet i find the choice of register a bit... cumbersome. the two lines with "thou" in them feel like they're in such contrast with the other two, "modern" lines. is that intentional? if not, maybe you could "age" these two other lines.
btw the photo is adorable. it made me smile. thanks for that. treehugger... (i've been called that so many times!) are those birches? the bark looks like they must be but i've never seen any this big. where was this taken?
I wanted to have a lighter comic tone to this admonition, so I changed the "you" pronouns to "thou" as a deliberate posture. But I will change it back to see what you think. The trees are aspens. I went from Crested Butte by way of Kebbeler Road, through the largest aspen grove in the world. A couple, who were guests at the Nordic Inn also, followed me and took the picture.
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